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Any suggestions or comments on my new poem?
HEARINGS OBSCURE Senses designated differ from the language plume. Some quills scratch, like William, faces foreign reflections; an internship Spurs applause linear in effigy, Chasing the niceties of posterity in the shape of the pubis. Other efforts aim to please without wearing masses. Emily iin progenies years, perhaps Delle pages only for the ears internal understanding Suffocate blinding tableaus, but Prime imagination. I own or train, yet resolutely standing in their contraction; Folding generated scenes abjured for reasons against the public, but the sights jab. I put to trial by jury Scribbled history, with eyes looking beyond tics measured, however, deaf to the desires of the public and insults.
Golden Seaman, why do you say Why did you not like? Say something like: "I do not like it" gives the author no use to improve their writing. I think what you wanted to write was "I did not get it, so I did not like it. "Do not punish the author just because you have not understand the poem. Personally, I liked it. There is a ring of hope in the end it seems that said that even if people do not like your writing now they could in the future. It also seems a little melancholy at the end with "I have, or train, yet resolutely standing in their contraction ... "online. It is a little confusing though. The first line says that there are differences between language and panache. Then throughout the poem everything you mention is the plume. You talk about other writers but no speakers or actors who acted out the words of William striped feather. Maybe you could mention that Emily's poems can be sung to many tunes, and plays are William acted on many thousands of floors Everyday throughout the world. Does "no train you mentioned speak and write? Or are you saying that your words are not for people to see, nor are they acted just right for you? Change is a bit confusing. I like the fact that it makes you think. I read it several times and has got a bit more each time. Keep up the good work!
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